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Wednesday, September 18, 2013

Scene 4-First Pass

Okay, here's my first pass! Critique away, and don't be afraid to be harsh. This is the time to really flesh things out while it's still rough :)


2 comments:

  1. I like the cute hand movement he makes at his moustache! I think you could push the facial expressions. Theres something about his reaction to the falling radio that seems off to me but I cant put my finger on what it is... sorry I know thats not helpful haha. I definitely think youre getting his personality through though. Nice!

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  2. Good personality! Would work on the timing overall, expecially on the crash. Seems delayed, his reaction i mean. Explore some spine reversals with the crash as well. Might really help push his movement.

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